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Bumpkin
Jan 27, 2011 22:59:28 GMT -6
Post by Cookie on Jan 27, 2011 22:59:28 GMT -6
Name: BumpkinAge: 15 months Rank: Beta Gender: Male Mate: Cookie Pack: Su'Tera Breed of Wolf: Timber wolf hybrid Describe your Wolf: He has the same markings and colors of a German Shepard. His eyes are a dark brown and he has a large, muscular body. Although he is muscular and strong he is always breaking something. Personality: He, like his mate, is very protective of his clan. He is a natural born fighter and will do what ever it takes to keep his family safe. He is very kind but will put you in your place if you step out of line. He Is a fun loving guy and respectful. He is a gentleman. He is polite and very rarely steps out of line. History: Bumpkin was born and raised in the Su'Tera pack. When his mother took Bumpkin to see the territory and to be familiar with it they found Cookie under a pile of dead leaves ( this was during Time of the Falling Leaves.) near the base of a tree. After they took her into the pack and was accepted the two became great friends and, obviously, fell in love. His parents died right after he became an Elite. They were killed by a bear trying to protect the pack. All of his siblings died right after they were born. Although this has happened he doesn't miss them because he never knew them. He became Beta because he always gave good advice and after the previous Betas stepped down Silver chose him. Photograph:
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Bumpkin
Jan 28, 2011 10:25:26 GMT -6
Post by Starry on Jan 28, 2011 10:25:26 GMT -6
Okay there are a few things with this one:
In the wolf description there shouldn't be things about his personality. You need to put more about his build, like for example, is he a skinny wolf who appears frail or is his build large and he looks very strong? Is his body type stocky or agile?
In the personality it needs to be expanded more as well it's far too short. What you have is good but add some more.
History is optional but if you have it, why not put in some more about HIM, Like perhaps who are his parents, are they dead or alive, did he have any siblings, how did he become Beta and why was he chosen? In the History part same goes for Cookie, More About HER.
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Bumpkin
Jan 28, 2011 14:40:45 GMT -6
Post by Starry on Jan 28, 2011 14:40:45 GMT -6
Alright he has been accepted, but I do recommend you work on these things Cookie, Anyway, Welcome to CTL and I hope you enjoy rping here. There is an open thread in Su'Tera or open your own.
Do remember the rules of one paragraph, 5 to 7 sentances; well-formed sentances.
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